The way you portay the whole story is simply amazing.. very nice.. keep it up..

I love this story, its really gud :)

I love the format of this, simple sentances leave the mind to expand and invent the world as they read. But as you continue to read the world that was created go through changes. It's like a dreamin a way. I'm glad she took him home, if she didn't the sto

what a story man... good job. very interesting. :)