An amazing journey in a fantasy set world following the confrontation between good and bad.
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As a new reader to short stories, I find this short story very descriptive and inspiring. This description here is used perfectly, I love it e.g "A scrawny boy with eyes like molten amber."
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This reads like the outline for a longer novel. I wound up skimming it instead of actually reading the plot. Start again with chapter one and act it out with dialogue and fuller action description and the readers will be engaged.
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