The Chronology of a Broken Trust

Fiction | 14th Dec 2011|14 min read

sonalpandey

Jenny has finally found happiness, even though her abusive stepfather is still a part of her life. She has decided to venture out and put her trust in someone, but that seems to be destroying her happiness once and for all.


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  • Titu

    13th Jan

    Excellent!

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  • illustrated18

    27th Mar

    It's good, I liked it but didn't love it. I wanted more detail, metaphors, analogy. It needs more subtle foreshadowing, and tighter dialogue, nothing that requires a major re-write of any section.

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  • 19th Dec

    Thanks a lot, Ma'am :)

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  • Ruhani

    19th Dec

    Interesting story Sonal. it has been nicely penned down really appreciate the way you have maintain its rhythm and its simplicity keep it up:)

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  • sonalpandey

    18th Dec

    Thanks Neha :)

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  • 17th Dec

    A little predictable somewhere in the middle, but well crafted. Job well done Sonal. :)

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  • sonalpandey

    16th Dec

    Thanks Abhineet

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  • 16th Dec

    Simple, short and sensible.

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  • sonalpandey

    16th Dec

    Shaayy, thank you soooo much.. You are the best :D :*

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  • 16th Dec

    Perfect. I am so much Impressed Sonal Pandey.! Know what, i could really smell the "you" factor in it, i mean if it had no author name written anywhere, i could have easily guessed its you. Too good. Hats Off boss. The words used, the way narrated, totall

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  • sonalpandey

    16th Dec

    Thanks a lot for the appreciation :)

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  • Jaspreet

    15th Dec

    Great story, Loved it... :)

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  • sonalpandey

    15th Dec

    Thank you :)

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  • 15th Dec

    Good Work.. Keep up the spirit.. :)

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  • 15th Dec

    sayi sayi! :D

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  • 15th Dec

    Great story, I loved the ending. Keep up the good work!

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  • sonalpandey

    15th Dec

    Thanks a lot everyone :)

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  • 15th Dec

    awesome work sonal !! Keep it up :)

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  • 15th Dec

    Very nice nd interestng story sonal..:-)

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  • 15th Dec

    aaaiiinnnn haaaiiiiinnnnn....nice story, ladki....hmmmmm...planning to win-win....again.. ;)

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  • 15th Dec

    rockinggg. nice story

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  • sonalpandey

    15th Dec

    Thanks a lot Rashi :)

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  • 15th Dec

    WOW is the word.....such an interesting kind of a story that i couldn't take my side off the screen...superb :)

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  • 15th Dec

    nice story well job sonal

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