loril

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  • loril Apr 13th2012
    Dane's Steer

    loril Nov 30th-0001

    9Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Inspirational | 7 Comments

    Thanks so much for your comment! It makes me cry, too... But that's because it's a true story.

  • loril Apr 13th2012
    Tom Grilligan

    jls685 Jan 16th2018

    6Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Fiction | 4 Comments

    Great story Josiah. I love your voice and the mood it sets for the character and story. Keep writing!!

  • loril Apr 5th2012
    Wonder If?

    geedda Nov 30th-0001

    7Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Inspirational | 4 Comments

    I appreciate your effort but I've heard most of these one-liners before. Don't think it works for a short story... A bit too long to keep my interest.

  • loril Apr 3rd2012
    Dane's Steer

    loril Nov 30th-0001

    9Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Inspirational | 7 Comments

    Thank you for your comment. Reading it over now, I'm thinking that the beginning is too long and drawn out, having very little to do with the story. What are your thoughts? Do you think it should be changed?

  • loril Mar 29th2012
    Notice Things, They Change You

    weseektheomissions Jan 16th2018

    8Votes, average: 3 out 5
    Others | 7 Comments

    I love the message of this story. It is far better to focus on the good things in life than to always look at the bad--even when we have to look hard for them. Life is so much richer than our daily existance often reveals.

loril