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THE KOI POND
Efficiently establishes the protagonist's personal stakes, though the backstory dump feels slightly heavy-handed.
Tom Wright Penn
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THE KOI POND
The heart-shaped pond built on top of the bodies is a great image, and the therapist scene at the end is where the story actually lands: "Oh, I got the closure I needed." Dark, and the comedy of her settling for second place after all that is a good touch. I do agree the verb tense wobbles between present and past, that would be the one thing to tighten.
dante
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THE KOI POND
An interesting approach to "closure." I think you need to examine verb tense as it shifts from present to past. Keep writing!
Arleen Mariotti