At first glance, the paragraphs are too long try to shorten them up a little. also the story is when a story like this is in first person it doesn't sound as good as a third-person story.

Tragic, yet beautiful, story. Makes you think about what is really important in life and how one person can change everything. Enjoy every moment!

The beauty, rawness and depth of this story drew me in. It reminded me of a 14-year old high school freshman, falling head over heels for the guy with the mysterious eyes in computer class. He became her muse and over the years, her really good friend. Li