Good chase stuff would have liked to have to have seen more detail about the creature but you kept up the pace throughout.

I read the piece twice and I learned a great deal about capturing a moment. You successfully transformed me to the scene. Love it. You deserve high 5

My gosh I felt it seriously dude i bet you are a real writer by career, if not make sure you quit your day job and become one now you will do so well people will love to read your stuff