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Great artpiece I like the presentation style and simple grammar
Angel
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A simple and fun treasure hunting story. I enjoyed reading it!
Rahayuni Sudiyanti
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Great story. I really enjoyed reading this,!!
Thomas G. Schmidt
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I honestly wish this story was broken into paragraphs so that we could understand it
Mairah Shuaib
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short story nice one- plainly said, i liked the way you wrote it no suspense, just out of the blue - clearly told- read my stories too they are the opposite, till the end i catch you in your seat.
Raji Koshy
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Thereโs a simple sense of adventure here, and the discovery of coins from different years gives the valley a small mystery. Lisa and the other children also have a clear goal, and the ending is easy to follow. However, the story moves so quickly that the characters and the strange valley never get much development. I was especially curious about why the coins were buried and why the rain was going to last four months, but those ideas arenโt explored. Adding dialogue, atmosphere, and a little more explanation would make the discovery feel more suspenseful and the ending more satisfying. The basic premise has room to become a stronger mystery.
Eleanor Hart