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  • barun Mar 2nd2012
    The second paragraph

    barun Jan 16th2018

    12Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Romance | 11 Comments

    Thank you

  • barun Feb 18th2012
    Chicken or Egg?

    Anish Jan 16th2018

    9Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Others | 4 Comments

    awesome one. brilliant reasoning !!! keep it up sir

  • barun Jan 28th2012
    Bad Temper or Nail the Fence

    dilipnahak Nov 30th-0001

    9Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Inspirational | 7 Comments

    i like the moral of the story

  • barun Jan 17th2012
    A time to say goodbye

    barun Jan 16th2018

    9Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Fiction | 6 Comments

    thank you so much

  • barun Jan 12th2012
    Midnight Rose

    aubreegrace Jan 22nd2018

    22Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Drama | 27 Comments

    Sure thing Aubree. Happy writing.

  • barun Jan 11th2012
    Midnight Rose

    aubreegrace Jan 22nd2018

    22Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Drama | 27 Comments

    For Barnett: The first few paragraphs are in present tense. Then it suddenly switches past tense. Then onwards, there's a mix of past and present. There's no harm in healthy criticism. Right?

  • barun Jan 10th2012
    Midnight Rose

    aubreegrace Jan 22nd2018

    22Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Drama | 27 Comments

    The sentence structure seems to swing haphazardly between present tense and past tense. Not that I'm a perfect writer myself, but there should have been a stable sentence structure. Good effort none the less.

  • barun Dec 26th2011
    the way to hell

    eddywalker Jan 16th2018

    14Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Horror | 10 Comments

    A lot of lines in the early paragraphs started with "He"s. But the last paragrapgh was awesome

  • barun Dec 26th2011
    The Container of Souls

    scottmar Jan 16th2018

    12Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Horror | 15 Comments

    awesome. reminded me one of the stories from edgar allan poe

  • barun Dec 25th2011
    CEDAR GROVE

    eldawson Jan 16th2018

    10Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Others | 6 Comments

    the way all the minute details have been explained is shrewd. good writing

  • barun Dec 25th2011
    Father and son

    barun Jan 16th2018

    19Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Fiction | 12 Comments

    thank u all. each and every word of ur appreciation is dear 2 me.

  • barun Dec 24th2011
    Father and son

    barun Jan 16th2018

    19Votes, average: 4 out 5
    Fiction | 12 Comments

    actually i don't hav a son in real life. i'm just 26. thanks 4 da appreciation.

barun