Some great moments in this clever story. Telling it from both perspectives is a great idea. Your description of the BJ is one of the longest and most detailed I've ever read and was very arousing. I wanted to know more about his perspective on her devouring his cock and taking control: physically he enjoyed it, but what about his emotions? Did he find it easy to effectively submit to her, or was it a struggle since he had come into it thinking he was the boss? I'm out of space it seems..!

I really enjoyed reading this. It's so visceral, so sensual, so in the moment. Your writing really captures how that kind of sex feels. Some of the phrases you used were fantastic ("I am captured prey and I want more") and the neck-biting detail is exquisite. And on a personal level your description of your "34HH right breast" really resonated because my wife is a 34H.

Loving it so far. Just reached where he tells you to open my mouth and the way you described the scene made my balls tingle. Thank you xx