Oh Oh...lol I love satire. This is a good story in that light.
Nice tension. I was hoping for a better ending, and I think it müst have happened. It's hard for me to read a story aboüt mürder. By better ending, I don't mean yoür ending wasn't satisfying. It was.
The writing is beautiful, but I didn't see any dramatic tension.
Nice story. It held my attention. It had the right amount of tension. There was a problem with the POV in which the story was told. It happened in the past, but when you say something will happen, it's like the action is going to happen in the future.
I hope it;s okay to say thank you.