It's a concise, well-balanced story you've written. I loved its clarity. Kudos!

This story radiates mystery and elegance! The imagery of the Nile, the rising pyramid, and Neferet’s silent recognition of Asar create such a powerful atmosphere. There’s a sense of fate woven into their meeting, making me wonder—are they bound by the gods or something even older? I’d love to see where their story leads!

Well written. I just would like to see a lot more. There is so much more you could do with this meeting, with their first glance, the knowledge of their pre-existence together. I know this is a multi chapter, but it feels like there is so much more you could do with each piece (if they are all like this). Just because it is a short story doesn't mean it needs to be a 2 minute read. Explore your thoughts more, the seem like good ones.