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The Heart of the Pharoah
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Days later, the temple was alive with celebration. The Pharaoh himself had come to see the progress of his great monument.

Neferet stood beside the High Priest as Djoser entered the temple, his presence suffocating, divine.

"I have heard whispers, Neferet," the Pharaoh said, his deep voice echoing through the temple halls. "It is time you fulfill your duty to Egypt."

She lowered her gaze. "I serve the gods, my Pharaoh."

"Then you shall serve me."

The words chilled her blood. She knew what they meant. The Pharaoh intended to make her one of his wives.

She forced a smile, bowing deeply. "As you wish, my divine ruler."

But inside, her heart shattered.

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Raju Chacko

Mar 23, 2025

It's a concise, well-balanced story you've written. I loved its clarity. Kudos!

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E Chance

Mar 19, 2025

This story radiates mystery and elegance! The imagery of the Nile, the rising pyramid, and Neferet’s silent recognition of Asar create such a powerful atmosphere. There’s a sense of fate woven into their meeting, making me wonder—are they bound by the gods or something even older? I’d love to see where their story leads!

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Martin Smith

Mar 3, 2025

Well written. I just would like to see a lot more. There is so much more you could do with this meeting, with their first glance, the knowledge of their pre-existence together. I know this is a multi chapter, but it feels like there is so much more you could do with each piece (if they are all like this). Just because it is a short story doesn't mean it needs to be a 2 minute read. Explore your thoughts more, the seem like good ones.

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Gabby C

Mar 4, 2025

Thank you for your comment, it is much appreciated. I will say that all stories (not including The Last Night) are all connected. It shows the past lives of the two main characters. Their names and circumstances are different in each lifetime, but their souls are the same throughout.

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