Huh? Oddly that makes some sense. Thanks for the reply.

Wow, The ending totally made up for the beginning. What seemed to be a harsh story of a lonely mans steps to work. Turned out to be even more destructive to him with the introduction of an exotic bird that flew […]

I’m left with the notion that there is more to this. But as I re-read the title I’m disappointed that there is not. The notion of waiting to me has to have a conclusion to the waiting. She is in prison, […]

As you finish reading this, I would like your imput. I’am new at writing and I’m learning what it takes to capture an audience. Please leave your thought, emotions, and most of all, your criticism. One can not […]

Thanks for the reply. That is what I thought the answer was. Thanks!

Poor Jojo. Love can break the heart of anything, but love can also mend the broken heart. Good story.

I love the format of this, simple sentances leave the mind to expand and invent the world as they read. But as you continue to read the world that was created go through changes. It’s like a dreamin a way. I’m […]

Fighting against the monster of lust. With sweet words and kind actions we fall into the bliss it creates, sometimes unwillingly. Good story, but it seems like something is missing, or my coffee has yet to kick […]

Great story! Great story! I love the simple things of life. We can get all crazy with the details and plot points, trying our hardest to make a great story and we forget the sometimes the simple things are the […]

You have a great imagination, but a great imagination can over look the simple basics of writing. Wether there is a word defining what I’m about to say, I do not know. But never the less, here it is. The word […]

Moments of serendipity. They always make for a good story. But It would have help in the tension if you dragged on a little more. But I’m a believer in heavy contrast to create a better moment of release […]

When one goes through a moment of loss, after the long nights of denial, and the cold mornings of reallity. We attach ourselves to the happy moments of thier lives. Either you have gone through such a moment of […]

Good story. If it was not labled ‘fiction’ I would have wondered if I was reading some sort of news paper ad. Which leads me to the question I have. What made you write this? I’m just wondering.

Great pace and tension. Just what a good short story should have. The only issue I have with it is the fact that you used a couple words that I had to look up to find out what they ment. This, of course made me […]